Wednesday, August 15, 2007

Random Sentences 1

Instead of the thick, white oval he was expecting, the pond was pure, clear glass. It had frozen so quickly it caught fish in mid-swim. You could see right to the bottom. Ben had never seen such perfection.

8 comments:

Nin Andrews said...

I love this. It's so surreal and magical . . .

Amy said...

I'll show you the whole (tiny) story...

dixiedreams said...

hmmm. is ben seeing the water or himself?

Amy said...

Good question Dixie. But since it's a nonfiction piece, I'm pretty sure the real Ben doesn't mean himself!;>

dork said...

OK- well this is what I was thinking and now that I have read Amy's last comment it wont make any sense but... What if Ben had fallen into the pond and could clearly see the fishes and the bottom. Time had stopped-like frozen water-because he was dead.
Yeah, I know it's kinda cheesy but I never said I was a writer, just a functionally illiterate art director.

dixiedreams said...

who's ben? the non-plot, she thickens. or maybe i'm just thick-headed.

Amy said...

Dork and Dixie,
These sentences are out of context, and while the whole piece is short, it's too long for the blog. Interesting ideas though...

dixiedreams said...

dork and dixie. sounds like a law firm. or a discount store.